Yes, it definitely feels clearer, although of course it might partly be that I already know how it's "supposed to be"...
I'm not sure if I should suggest this -- you're a much more experienced writer...
> Everyone had dismounted. Éowyn and the others waited as Legolas, Rumil, and one of the twins climbed up to the top of the outcrop.
In the previous "scenes," part of what helped me to get oriented was that I was always able to vaguely "picture" their relative position to the river. Even though here you write "the outcrop," not "an outcrop," making it clear that this is the same one that had been mentioned before, somehow I "lost" the river.
Somewhere between the 3rd and 5th paragraph I figured it out, so this could really just be me, being slow today...
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I'm not sure if I should suggest this -- you're a much more experienced writer...
> Everyone had dismounted. Éowyn and the others waited as Legolas, Rumil, and one of the twins climbed up to the top of the outcrop.
In the previous "scenes," part of what helped me to get oriented was that I was always able to vaguely "picture" their relative position to the river. Even though here you write "the outcrop," not "an outcrop," making it clear that this is the same one that had been mentioned before, somehow I "lost" the river.
Somewhere between the 3rd and 5th paragraph I figured it out, so this could really just be me, being slow today...