I love how you control the pacing. It's neither too fast, so that we lose the suspense and arduousness of a real chase/tracking, nor too slow -- there are all kinds of interesting interactions and scenery along the way to flesh out the characters and the world.
The characters are witty without being trite, larger-than-life without being Mary/Marty Sue/Stus. It's great to watch this universe grow!
The only point in the story when I felt slightly disoriented was at the following transition break:
> “Of course.” Elrohir moved his concentration, pictured Galanthir in his mind, and quickly passed on the information as they headed back to the others.
> ………………………………………………………………
> They dismounted and waited as Legolas, Rumil, and one of the twins climbed up to the top of the outcrop. Gimli and Céolfrith walked a little way away to ‘take care of bodily functions’, as Legolas had put it the day before, and the others took care of changing the packs and tack onto fresh horses before they went on.
It took me a couple of readings to put it together that we had "rewound" to a point before Rumil "made contact with" Tindome, and am retaking the scene from another pov. Maybe I'm just slow today...
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I love how you control the pacing. It's neither too fast, so that we lose the suspense and arduousness of a real chase/tracking, nor too slow -- there are all kinds of interesting interactions and scenery along the way to flesh out the characters and the world.
The characters are witty without being trite, larger-than-life without being Mary/Marty Sue/Stus. It's great to watch this universe grow!
The only point in the story when I felt slightly disoriented was at the following transition break:
> “Of course.” Elrohir moved his concentration, pictured Galanthir in his mind, and quickly passed on the information as they headed back to the others.
> ………………………………………………………………
> They dismounted and waited as Legolas, Rumil, and one of the twins climbed up to the top of the outcrop. Gimli and Céolfrith walked a little way away to ‘take care of bodily functions’, as Legolas had put it the day before, and the others took care of changing the packs and tack onto fresh horses before they went on.
It took me a couple of readings to put it together that we had "rewound" to a point before Rumil "made contact with" Tindome, and am retaking the scene from another pov. Maybe I'm just slow today...
Can't wait for #29!